This is your opportunity to demonstrate your understanding revising by providing examples from your narrative draft where you have improved on the topics of word choice, dialog use, transitions, and sentence structure.

What you will do for each question is...

Copy and paste a section of your original text where you can improve on the topic of the question
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In a different color font, paste in the edited version of that text.
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Add a 1 sentence comment about why the edited version is better.

Example of Word Choice:

In the beginning, we were walking downhill to the sea.

It all began as we were meandering lazily down the winding path that led to the ocean's edge.

The edited version is better because it gives my reader a clear picture of the setting in their head.